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Focus on the findings in survey stories

Don’t lead with study— or the methodology

It’s not the survey, silly. Most survey stories fail because they focus on the survey, not on the survey results. Here’s how to organize a successful survey story that focuses on the findings, not on the poll:

Survey results press release
The results are in The best survey results press releases and blog posts focus on the results, not on the survey itself. Image by Rawpixel.com

Set up the survey in the intro.

Start strong.

1. Don’t lead with the survey. Communicate one to three key survey results in the lead. For John Armato’s story about an H&R Block survey, the FleishmanHillard PR pro uses a compression of details lead. He squeezes three fascinating findings into one paragraph:

Most 8- to 11-year-olds would rather go to school year-round than pay a nickel of ‘allowance tax.’ But pit that nickel against Nickelodeon, and they’d gladly fork it over to protect their tube time. They also imagine Batman would pay more income tax than either Superman or Spiderman.

Notice that Armato doesn’t worry about covering the survey itself in the lead. You don’t need to.

2. Summarize the survey in the nut graph. Now that you’ve shown the fascinating findings, it’s time to introduce the survey itself in a sentence or two:

The dominance of TV, probable wealth of the caped crusader and preference for college tuition are among the findings of a nationwide survey just released by H&R Block.

3. Describe the survey methodology in the background section. Paragraph three is soon enough for this information:

More than 300 third-, fourth- and fifth-graders were interviewed at shopping malls in 10 cities across the country.

Of course, you’ll want to link to more details for the wonks who want it. Make your methodology, survey questions and full results available, just not in the story itself.

List the survey results in the body.

List three to seven key findings in the body of your survey story. Use a hierarchical structure, moving from most important (or most surprising, or valuable or hilarious …) finding to least. But, to avoid ending with a whimper instead of a bang, finish with your second-most-important finding.

  • Parents get cranky while figuring taxes. Nearly half of the kids chose “crabby and mad” to describe their parents’ attitude when figuring their taxes. Only 8 percent chose “excited and happy.”
  • No on allowance tax to cover education … When asked whether it would be a good idea or a bad idea to require kids to pay taxes on their allowances to help pay for schools, 70 percent thought it would be a bad idea.
  • … but yes on taxes to watch TV. Allowances everywhere took a beating, however, when kids were asked “Given a choice, would you rather pay taxes on your allowance or not be allowed to watch TV?” More than half said they’d rather pay the tax.

Wind up in the conclusion.

1. Transition to the end in the wrapup. What interesting finding can you use to wind the story down?

Incidentally, a majority of kids (52 percent) think Jordan pays more income tax than [the president]. In all likelihood, they are correct, considering Jordan’s reported $65 million income. …

2. Circle back to the lead in the kicker. Leave a lasting impression with a concrete, creative, provocative final paragraph.

No word on how he compared to Batman.

Survey the scene.

Survey stories are a staple of content marketing writing. Use this structure to make the most of your survey reports.

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