“There it was, hidden in alphabetical order.”
Alphabetical structure isn’t as easy as ABC
I find myself once again on Weight Watchers. (Sigh. Why can’t I make that brie-on-brioche diet work for me?) Which means that I often find myself amused by the structure the company uses to organize information.
First, some food for thought
Weight Watchers, for those of you who aren’t members-for-eternity like I am, is essentially a bunch of nutritional research wrapped in a math problem.
It’s like a budget: You get so many points a day (29 for me) and have to decide how to spend them. The two brownies I ate on Sunday, for instance, came in at 51 points, or 175.862 percent of my daily allotment.
All of which means that the Weight Watcher spends a lot of time looking up how many points foods cost — sometimes with a simple “find” function on her iPhone app, other times browsing lists trying to figure out, say, which kind of cracker gives her the biggest bang for the point.
And that brings me to the problem with Weight Watchers’ organizing structure for food lists: It’s alphabetical.
‘Alphabetical sorting must (mostly) die’
- If readers know the name of the thing they want — the name of their state, for example — they can usually find it pretty quickly.
- Communicators don’t have to develop a structure. Because we all know the alphabet, it’s easy to put the information in the right order.
But too often, Nielsen says, alphabetical order doesn’t work. Usually, that’s because of one of two problems:
1. The information already has an inherent structure: smallest to largest, say, or earliest to latest. Alphabetical order obscures that structure, making it harder for readers to find what they’re looking for.
Zappos, for instance, organizes shoe width alphabetically: 3E, 4A, 4E, AA, AAA, B, C, D, E, EE. But narrowest to widest — 4A, AAA and AA to 3E and 4E — actually makes better sense.
2. Users don’t know the name of the thing they want. Or writers don’t know what readers call the thing they want. And that’s a huge issue in alphabetical structure: It only works if you use the words in the reader’s head, not the words in your head.
Where’s the thing I want?
Weight Watchers suffers from both of those problems:
1. Categorical structure probably makes better sense than alphabetical for foods and food groups. Weight Watchers starts out organizing food by category, such as:
- Bread and baked goods
- Dairy and eggs
- Meat and poultry
But another level or two of categories would probably make sense. For instance, under “meat and poultry,” you might have categories like:
- Cornish game hen
This approach would help people work their way through maybe three levels of categorical lists before they got to a much smaller alphabetical list of individual items. Remember: It’s easier for people to think in decision layers — three lists of three items each, say, instead of one list of nine items.
And note: You can use two types of organizational structure in one list. The broad structure here is categorical, but you can also alphabetize the categories.
2. The words in my head aren’t the words on the list. The second problem with the Weight Watchers food lists is that the name the company uses for the thing I want isn’t the name I use.
For instance: Would you look up Aidells Andouille mini sausage under sausage? Andouille? Aidells? Mini? Weight Watchers votes for Aidells — a problem if you, like me, have never heard of the company.
Instead, I’d start with the main subject and add detail to the right:
Sausage, andouille, Aidells mini.
- Frankfurter or hot dog? I’d look for it under “H”; Weight Watchers puts it in the F’s. Unless, that is, you think to look for “Hebrew National Beef franks.”
- Skinless Cornish game hen? It’s right where it belongs: in the S’s.
- Whole raw turkey with skin and bones? Look in the W’s, for “whole.” There you’ll find it listed at a whopping 13 points. Which is great, because there’s nothing like a whole raw turkey with skin and bones to tide you over that 4 p.m. slump.
Categorical: A good place to start
Organizing by categories is often a good place to begin. But there are other structures, too:
- Location, or geographic structure
- Time, or chronological organization
- Hierarchy, or order of importance
- Ordinal, or in an ordered sequence, such as smallest to largest or narrowest to widest
Tip: If you can use one of these approaches, don’t use alphabetical structure.
“Alphabetical sorting must (mostly) die,” says Nielsen. “Typically, when you reach for an A-Z structure, you should give yourself a little extra kick and seek out something better.”
Where, oh, where, would they look for this?
All of this reminds me of a story told by Skip Boyer, ABC, the late, great executive producer and senior writer for Best Western International Inc. He wrote:
“My sister, Barb, … bought a new Subaru. After a time, she had reason to change a tire on it. Not having done so before, she got out the owner’s manual and looked in the index under ‘tire.’ After a lengthy and frustrating search, she finally found the information she needed in the index under ‘I,’ for ‘If you have a flat tire …’”
Don’t let this happen to you.
How are you organizing your information?
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“‘Conversation’ is just a metaphor.
Then again, no it’s not.”
Hugh MacLeod, GapingVoid blogger
Publish your posts in the morning
When’s the best time to post to your blog? Before 10 a.m. Eastern time, says viral marketing scientist Dan Zarrella.
Zarrella surveyed more than 1,400 blog readers and studied more than 170,000 blog posts and learned that people are more likely to view, link and comment on posts in the morning. Visiting blogs becomes decreasingly popular during the rest of the day.
But publishing several times a day “led to a huge increase in the blog’s success,” Zarrella found in an analysis of the 1,000 most popular blogs on the Web.
Specifically, frequent blogging at different times of day:
- Boosts incoming links
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- Attracts visitors
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- Increases customer acquisition
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“The camera can photograph thought.
It’s better than a paragraph of sweet polemic.”
Dirk Bogarde, English actor and novelist
Tell your story with a photo and info nibbles
I love Eating Well’s departments “Bites” and “Last Bite” so much that I stole them.
Modeled them, that is, for a recurring feature in Health, one of Wylie Communications’ client magazines.
“Bites” uses this formula:
- Standing head
- Strong image
- 400 words or so of marginalia — facts and stats, mini stories, callouts and other free-standing pieces of copy
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“A mission statement … becomes a bad thing
when [it] devolves into platitudinous pabulum
that employees clearly recognize as hypocrisy.”
Darrell Rigby, partner at Bain & Company
Tighten your mission statement
A friend was tapped to help craft his company’s mission statement. After months at the table — arguing over arcane jargon; taking out commas, then putting them back in; and debating whether “that” or “which” was the right word to use in the sixth sentence — the job was finally done.
Weeks later, after the credo was printed in six-point type, laminated on a business card and safely stored in wallets and the backs of desk drawers, management held a surprise. Employees in team meetings were “invited” to stand up in front of their colleagues and recite the mission statement from memory.
My friend recited Hamlet’s soliloquy.
He had no idea what the mission statement said — and he’d been on the team that wrote it.
Make it short
As with so much in life, less in a mission statement is actually more. Short credos stick in people’s minds. Long ones just fade away.
“A mission statement should be both brief and global,” says communication consultant David P. Seifert, ABC. “It’s a concise statement about [your] overriding purpose.”
- Make it an elevator pitch. Could you sell your idea, your team or your communication vehicle to your CEO in the time it takes the elevator to get from the first floor to the third?
- Keep it to eight words or less. Eight words is the length of sentence a reader can understand fully at a glance, according to research by the American Press Institute.
- Put it on a bumper sticker. If you can’t convey your purpose on a bumper sticker, says Gil Maurer, former president of Hearst Publishing, it’ll never fly.
Make it shorter
But shorter’s better.
Condé Nast Traveler condenses its aim into a three-word mission statement-cum-tagline:
“Truth in Travel”
And the International Association of Business Communicators does Condé Nast Traveler one letter shorter/better. Its credo:
That’s a mission statement I could recite from memory.
Sources: Ann Wylie, Planning Powerful Publications, IABC, 2002
Abe Peck, “The Mission Position,” Folio:, Nov. 1, 2002
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